Waiting with excitement for our cross country race, I was jumping up and down like a crazy monkey in the jungle. It was the 10 year old boys turn to run. Mr Burt said “On your marks, get set go”. I sprinted as fast as I could and I was coming first but sadly Lorenzo and Wyatt dashed past me like Sin Cara from The WWE. I could hardly see them, they were fast.
Eventually I ran on to the bridge where Ms Squires was right in front of me taking pictures of us. I tried saying “Hi Ms” but I was to fatigued to say anything. A quarter of the way I really thought that I was going to collapse. The track was so rocky.
While Anthony was jogging past me he caught up to Lorenzo and Wyatt. As soon as I rounded a corner this man said “Guess what your half way”. I felt like I was blessed.
Suddenly one of the shells nearly tore my shoe at the bottom. Luckily I've got shoes on." I thought to myself. Finally we turned around for the last stretch at the reserve near Tamaki College’s Technology hall.It was so rocky it felt like I was running on a desert.
Coming up through the bush onto our school field Hossana, Marvin and I had a foot race. We were all running as fast as we could but I only came second so I was so disappointed. I said “Flip I wish I came first” Marvin interrupted “It’s not about winning you know, it’s just about having fun and you should be proud that you completed the race”. I could now finally say “Hi Ms”.
4 comments:
Hi room 14 that a cool cross counted
as I was running I stop my feet
were saw but I kept going good work room 14 keep it up.from Anthony
Hi Shayne I thought that your writing was a pretty interesting cross country story.It had lots of vocab that caught my attention.One thing you need to work on is make your story a little more understandable so I can finish the whole story.
Hi Shayne,
that was a very inspiring story, you really thought about the words you were using. It was just amazing. Well done.
From Jouan.
Hi rm 14, I really like the interesting story that Shayne was telling. He use really good vocabulary. KEEP IT UP SHAYNE!
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