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Thursday, October 10, 2013

Early on we used this animation Ms Squires found online as the motivation for writing a narrative. It demonstrated really well the structure of a narrative, with an orientation, the building up of events to a climax and then a solution. As it had no dialogue it also illustrated for us how to show emotions, and thoughts through actions and expressions, and to try and use these descriptions in our own writing to make it more effective.

Here is an example written by Setafano and Tevita



The determined boy was dangling from the icy mountain. As he approached the tip of the mountain he pulled himself up with all his might. He was relieved that he had achieved his goal. As he arrived at the main entrance of the dojo, he was shy and cold. All of a sudden a creepy old man opened the door. The man with a penetrating stare glared at the boy,s making the kid scared.  The boys asked if he could come inside, but every time he knocked on the door the mischievous old man told the boy to go away.


The boy felt disappointed, his shoulders and head fell. The second time it happened his mind told him that the master did not want him at the dojo, so he turned and left But then he felt that had to prove himself. So he busted the door down and wanted to have a showdown with him. The master pointed again. This time he saw the sign, “USE THE SIDE ENTRANCE” He felt ashamed when he saw the sign. He was just embarrassed. The End!

2 comments:

Vimi Chandra said...

This is a message from Room 17 at Holy Cross Catholic School. We really enjoyed watching the short video. It was very creative and it really brought the story to life.

hazel said...

like your movie by rm12